Michigan-Restaurant

I felt as if my heart was going to bust into tears as it stroke 11:00 at night. At this time, a year ago, I was driving to a restaurant with my grandparents. we ate a lovely dinner. Then it was time to go home. It was raining so my grandfather went to bring the car around for us. Five minutes passed by and he still didn’t come. My grandmother went to see what was wrong and told me to stay put. She too didn’t come back. I heard a scream and a loud bang. Police cars came rushing by. I knew something happened that would change my life forever. I still can’t get the memory of my grandparent’s lifeless eyes. The reason I was with my grandparents in the first place was because back in my home town, detroit, michigan, my parents didn’t have enough money to raise me properly. As a result, they put me on an airplane to Arizona, to my grandparents. My mother’s parents were like my parents. and now they were gone. But in their will, I was to inherit their money and go home to my mother and father’s open arms. It has been a year. And I have moved on. Now my story has nothing to do with this. I have told you this little bit of information to show you how I have felt for the past year and to tell you a little about myself.
My name is Heather Richardson. I am 17 years old. And I live happily with my mother, for my father is also dead. I am an only child. And my heart still belong to me. For now.

Chapter one
“Heather, your going to be late for school if you don’t get your butt out of that bed of yours!” my mother yelled from the bottom of the stair case. The first day of school had arrived and I didn’t want to greet what layed ahead of me. I got out of my full sized bed, very comfortable i might add, and got dressed in a blue blouse with a black mini skirt. I wasn’t the ont to get fancy but first immpressions count! I ate breakfast, a soggy bowl of cereal, as fast as I could so I wouldn’t taste it. Kissed my mother food bye and headed for my car. It wasn’t the newest tachnology type of car, it was plain black and well, plain. I didn’t want to be late so I tried to drive as fast as I could without getting a ticket. I turned out to be early so I just sat in my car, praying I wouldn’t embarass my self. Then I heard a rapping on my window. I jumped and turned to see who it was or what it was. Daniel West was smiling in at me. He has had a crush on me ever since who knows when. He was a simple guy, brown hair, blue eyes, and of course, a ladies man. but he wasn’t for me. I opend the door against my will.

please tell me what you think about my book so far and let me know if I should change anything, from where i put things, what i put in it, up to the very last detail like names or characteristics! please let me know!
it is a romance
it is a romance/ suspense

Best reply by december?baby:

wow ! great !

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I am writting a book and I want you to read the preface and a little of the first chapter, what do you think?